【 – 小学作文】
篇一:《作文 (1)》
Protect the Environment
Today, our environment has some problems. As a middle school student, we should do something to improve our environment condition. So, what can we do?
I think the first thing is that we ourselves
shouldn’t destroy the environment, such as throwing the
rubbish about. We can also take part in some common
activities to plant more trees, for the trees can do a lot
help to our environment. And if we see someone do harm things to the environment, like spitting on the ground or stepping on the grass, we can stop them from doing that. If there’s a factory which destroys the environment, it’s our right to tell the government or the police about it. All in all, although we are students we can still do a lot of things to protect our environment. So we should act from now on to make our contributions to the environment, for it’s our home.
近来，“光盘行动(Clean Plate Campaign)”悄然流行，提倡“节约型社会（economized society）”已成共识。请你根据下列表格中的信息，用英语为某英语报社写一篇短文，谈
注意：（1）短文须包括上述要点，应适当增加细节，以使行为连贯。
（2）词数：80词左右，短文的标题和开头已给出（不计入总词数）。
Let’s start with the things around us!
Recently, the “Clean Plate Campaign” has been very popular with many people. Our government is doing its best to build an economized society.
As a middle school student, I think ______________
【答案】
Let’s start with the things around us! the things around us. Firstly, make sure that the lights are turned off when we finish our work and leave the room. Secondly, we can save as much paper as possible. Thirdly, it is important for us to form the habit of turning off the tap after it is used. What’s more, we must not spend money buying unnecessary things. When we eat, we’d better not use one—off chopsticks and we mustn’t waste food.
In a word, saving energy is very important. Let’s work together from now on!(97words)
微笑是一种态度。请你以“Learn to Smile”为题，为你校《英语园地》写一篇稿件。 内容要点包括：
1.学会对自己微笑；
2.学会对他人微笑；
3.微笑是一种语言。
注意：
1.紧扣主题，表述全面、准确、流畅；{作文1,1=?}.
2.词数：80－100；
3.文章中不要出现真实姓名和校名。
参考词汇：态度attitude;自信心confidence
Learn to Smile
范文：
Smile is an attitude for life. We should face everything with smile.
In our life, there may be something unpleasant. For example, you fail in an exam; or you are misunderstood by your friends. These things may make you feel bad. Then what will you do? Why not learn to smile? Smile to yourself can bring back your confidence and beat the unhappy feelings. Sometimes, the greatest enemy is yourself. Most important of all, smiling benefits your health.
We should also learn to smile to others, and it will help us to get closer to other people. Therefore, smile is the most widely understood language.{作文1,1=?}.
Let’s learn to smile, I believe our world will be more wonderful and our life will be happier and happier.
【2013河南】每个人都是独一无二的，都有与众不同之处，人们喜欢你一定会有很多原因。请以“What makes me a good friend?”为题写一篇英语短文。
要求: 1.语言表达准确，短文连贯通顺;
2.文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.80词左右。
What makes me a good friend?
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【范文】
One possible version
What makes me a good friend?
I am a boy easy to get along with. I never get angry easily. That's the most important reason that makes me so popular.
I'm always ready to help others. Whenever my friends meet with troubles, I will give them a hand without even a moment's thought.
Besides, I'm quite humorous. I can always tell some jokes or funny stories to make my friends laugh. They say time spent with me is full of fun.
I'm honest I never tell lies. So I'm a friend worth trusting.
篇二:《作文范文1》
请根据下列要点提示以My home为题,
写一篇60词左右的短文。
提示：
1. 有一个客厅(sitting room), 一个厨房(kitchen), 两间卧室(bed room)；
2. 晚上喜欢坐在客厅的沙发上, 和父母一起看电视；
3. 卧室里有一张椅子, 一台电脑和一张大床。
4. 最喜欢的地方是阳台（balcony）, 我在那里玩游戏, 与朋友聊天。
My home
My home is very beautiful. There is a sitting room, a kitchen and two bedrooms in it. In the sitting room, I like sitting on the sofa and watching TV with my parents in the evening. In my bedroom, there is a chair, a computer and a big bed. My favourite place is the balcony. I can play games and chat with my friends there.
I love my home very much!
以“My bedroom”为题写一篇英语作文, 根据提示词对所给图片进行描述。词数60左右。开头和结尾已给出, 不计入总词数内。
My bedroom
I have a small and beautiful bedroom
On the left of the door, there is a piano. In the left-hand corner of the room, you can see a bed with a small table beside it. On the small table, there is a lamp, a toy and a photo of mine. Next to the table, there is a desk. On the desk there is a shelf with many books on it. In the right-hand corner of the room, you will find two wardrobes. I put my clothes in them. I like my bedroom very much. Do you like it?
说到蛇, 大家都可能认为蛇很可怕, 其实不然。汤姆读了一本关于蛇的书之后, 对蛇有了全新的认识。请根据下面表格信息提示, 写一篇60词左右的短文。开头已给出, 不计入总词数 。
Tom was afraid of snakes before. Yesterday he read a book on snakes.
After reading the book, he knows about snakes better. He thought all snakes were poisonous and harmful before, but now he knows some are not. He thought we should kill snakes when we saw them. But now, he thinks we should protect them because snakes are our friends and are important in nature.
Now he is not afraid of snakes any more, but likes them.
假如你们班要重新选班长, 你认为Amy在许多方面很适合, 你想推荐她。请根据所给提示, 给王老师写一封60词左右的推荐信。信的开头、结尾已给出, 但不计入要求词数。 提示: 1. 她学习刻苦、认真, 做事细心, 能歌善舞, 还经常帮同学打扫卫生；
2. 她很有礼貌, 对同学很友好；
3. 她在上周五放学回家的路上拣到一个钱包, 一直在路边等到失主(owner)回来认领钱包, 失主很感激她。
Dear Miss Wang,
I would like to recommend Amy for our monitor. Amy works hard and is careful
with everything. She is good at singing and dancing. She often helps others do some cleaning. She is a polite girl and she is friendly to all of us. Last Friday, she found a wallet on her way 1
home after school. She kept on waiting until the owner came back to get it. The owner thanked her very much.
I think she’ll be a good monitor.
假设你是图①中的小女孩, 请你根据图画内容提示, 以第一人称的口吻, 写一篇60词左右的短文, 描述一下昨天下午发生的事。开头已给出, 不计入总词数。(看到小偷偷东西，然后报案)
Yesterday afternoon, I saw a man opening my neighbour’s door when I arrived home The man was holding a bag. I realized that he was a thief. I thought I was not strong enough to catch him. Suddenly, I got an idea. I took out my mobile phone and took a photo of the thief. Then I called the police. The police caught the thief very soon with the picture of the thief.
请根据图示并发挥你的想象力, 描述一下Green Middle School 的校规。60词左右
Green Middle School rules
There are too many rules in Green Middle School. For example, the students can’t eat in the classroom. They have to eat in the dining hall. The students can play soccer or games on the playground,
but they can’t play in the classroom or hallways. The students can’t run in the hallways, either. In the school library, they can read books but they must keep quiet.
假设去年暑假你过了一个无聊的假期, 请以I had a really boring summer vacation为题写一篇短文。
要求：
1. 短文内容至少要对四项活动进行描述;
2. 字数70词左右。开头已给出, 不计入总词 数。
I had a really boring summer vacation
I don’t like holidays. I always feel bored in my holidays.
Last summer vacation I didn’t go to any interesting places. The first month, I just stayed at home and watched TV. Sometimes I read books or studied my subjects. My father and mother went to work every day. They didn’t want me to play outside or play computer games. Then the next month I went to my grandparents’ home and stayed with them. It was also boring. I wanted to swim in the sea, but they said it was dangerous. So I had to stay at home and watch TV again.
假设你是一名天气预报员, 请从下列景点中选出两至三个, 用简练、正确的语言对天气情况进行描述, 并针对具体的天气情况给游客提出合理建议。
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Weather Report
Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. Are you going to visit Mount Emei in Sichuan? It is cloudy in the morning, and in the afternoon it will be rainy. So please take an umbrella with you. The weather of Mount Tai is very good. It is sunny all day.
And it will be warm too. You should wear a hat. Tianchi is also a good place to visit. It is snowy today. If you go there, you can see the beautiful snow. I think you should take some warm clothes if you go to Jilin.
期末考试将至, 同学们一定都做好了准备。本期书面表达请大家联系学期初的计划, 回顾一下在本学期的学习过程中自己哪些方面做得特别好, 还有哪些不足之处。题目自拟, 把自己的心情写出来, 可适当发挥。
I will work harder
I didn’t do well this term. I was a little lazy. I didn’t study hard at math, because I thought it was too difficult for me. I like football, so I usually played it with my classmate after school. Then when I went back home, I was so tired that I couldn’t study well. So maybe I will fail in the final tests. But I will study harder next term. And I will keep studying English in the summer holiday because it’s my favourite subject.
暑期将至, 同学们应该有很多计划和打算吧。请以My plan for summer vacation为题, 把你的打算和愿望都写出来吧！Best wishes for you all! Wish you have a wonderful holiday!
My plan for summer vacation
Summer vacation is coming. I think I’ll have a busy vacation. In June, I plan to practise the violin every morning. You know practice makes perfect. I will have many lessons and take part in a concert. Then every afternoon, I will spend some time doing my homework and playing with my friends. But I will spend most of my free time watching TV. In July, my parents will take me to Australia. It must be relaxing and interesting.
假如今天是星期天，你和弟弟去中山公园 (Zhongshan Park) 游玩。请根据下列提示内容写一篇60词左右的短文。
Today is Sunday. I go to Zhongshan Park with my brother. Zhongshan Park is very beautiful. There are a lot of interesting things. We play games in the park. When we are tired and hungry, we go to buy food and fruit in the supermarket near the park. We enjoy ourselves there. We hope to visit the park again.
下面的表格介绍了上个星期天的春游活动。请根据表格中所提供的信息写一篇60词左右的短文。
Last Sunday we went on a spring trip in West Park. Early in the morning, we met at the school gate and started out by bike.
First we went to the zoo to see animals. Then we went boating on the river. We had a picnic at lunch time. Of course we took many beautiful photos.
When we got home, we were tired but very happy, because we had a good day.
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假设你是夏雪，你的笔友卡特里娜想到你居住的海滨城市旅游。根据下面的示意图给她写一封不少于50词的电子邮件，告诉她怎样到你家，并且告诉她在你家每天都可以步行去海滩玩。开头及结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。
Dear Katrina,
I’m very glad you are visiting our city.
Now let me tell you how to get to my home. After you get out of the train station, you can take the No. 8 bus to Yingbin Road. It takes about half an hour. The bus stop is near my home. It’s not very far from my home to the beach. We can go there on foot. It only takes 20 minutes. I hope to see you soon.
请根据下面表格中的内容提示, 以What are the family doing?为标题, 写一篇50词左右的短文, 描述一下这家人的活动, 可适当发挥。
Look! What are the family doing now? Tom is doing his homework. His sister Mary is playing computer games. She likes it very much. She usually plays them on weekends. What are the father and grandfather doing? They are playing chess. And what about the mother and grandmother? Oh! They are talking.
假设你们学校最近成立了环保俱乐部, 你
也加入了, 并准备一起开展以下的环保活
动：
1. 回收 (recycle) 一些废旧物品, 如纸张, 瓶子, 电池 (battery)等;
2. 看见同学乱扔垃圾要制止(stop, throw);
3. 宣传保护环境的重要性(make, know,
important, protect)。
要求：
1. 根据以上提示要点写一篇英语短文, 文章必须包括要点的所有内容； 2. 60词左右, 文章开头已给出。
Several days ago, an environment club was formed in our school. We are going to do something to help protect our environment. We will recycle things like waste papers, bottles and batteries. And if we see our schoolmates throwing rubbish on the ground, we will stop them. We also plan to make everybody know it’s important to love and protect our environment. Would you like to join us?
你的英国朋友Bill想学习汉语, 来到了北京。请给他写一封信, 告诉他如何学习汉语。60词左右。
要求：
1. 语句通顺、书写工整;
2. 可用所给的提示词语, 也可以适当发挥。
Dear Bill,
How is it going? Let me tell you how to learn Chinese. I think you may go to Chinese classes, make Chinese friends and talk with them. You can listen to the radio or watch TV. 4
You can also read some Chinese stories. You should have a dictionary. It’s very useful. You can ask Chinese teachers or friends for help.
Chinese is not difficult. I think you can learn it well soon.{作文1,1=?}.
Good luck!
Yours,{作文1,1=?}.
Rose
假如你是英国男孩Ben, 想找一份周末的兼职工作。请根据下面的提示信息写一篇自我介绍。 50词左右。
Hi! I’m Ben. I’m an English boy. I’m fourteen years old. I like music, and I can play the guitar and dance. I can get on well with kids. I want to teach kids to play the guitar on weekends. If you need me, call me at 279-3178. My e-mail address is benlucky @yahoo.com. I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.
请根据所给图片及提示词, 写一篇60词左右的短文, 谈谈我们可以为保护环境做些什么。 注意：
1. 文章必须包括图片的全部内容；
2. 文章开头已经给出, 不计入总词数{作文1,1=?}.
What can we do to protect Earth?we can start with the small things. First, we can plant more trees around us to make our city greener. Second, we should stop people throwing
rubbish onto the ground. Third, we should stop using plastic bags for shopping. Fourth, we
should stop wasting water. Let’s do our best
to make our earth cleaner and more beautiful.
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篇三:《一年级作文：1+1=几》
一年级作文：1+1=几
广东省深圳市 龙岗区坪地镇第一小学四（2）班 曹润波
小明刚上一年级，什么都不会。数学课，老师问小明：“1+1=几”小明说：“不知道。”老师温和地说：“回家问爸爸妈妈，明天再来回答。”
放学一到家，爸爸正在看足球赛。小明问爸爸：“1+1=几”爸爸还以为是问足球赛的结果呢，兴奋地说：“中国队赢了！”小明有点不放心，又去厨房问妈妈：“1+1=几”由于抽油烟机的声音太大，妈妈跟本就没听见，见小明来了，赶紧说：“翻一下青菜，再放点盐。”
第二天上数学课，老师要小明回报结果。小明大声回答：“爸爸说1+1=中国队赢了，妈妈又说1+1=翻一下青菜，再放点盐。”顿时，教学里哄堂大笑。
曹润波，广东省深圳市龙岗区坪地镇第一小学四（2）班；指导老师：彭忠诚
指导教师：彭忠诚
篇四:《优秀作文1》
中考作文满分五大技巧
【技巧一】：作文成绩看字迹，得分要素是第一
任何形式的作文考试，阅卷老师打分时，第一眼，看的是字迹。因此，写作文必须要把字写好。记住，考作文考的是内容，而不是书法，切忌字迹潦草。 【技巧二】：考试作文五六段，干净整洁看卷面
考试作文中，要注意及时分段，三四个段落显得少了，八九个段落，显得琐碎了些。除非有特殊情况，段落以五六个段落为好。此外，卷面一定要整洁，不要涂改得乱七八糟。我的看法是，考试作文每段最好别超过5行，顶多是5行半。切忌一段都八九行，写成“大肚子作文”。一旦给阅卷老师视觉上的疲劳，影响他的心理，分数就受影响。如果有必要，死拉硬拽也要注意分段。 【技巧三】：色彩对比也关键，建议用笔选择蓝
考试作文的卷子上，都是用黑颜色印刷的方格。如果你用非常粗而且黑的钢笔答题，墨水容易“泄一滩”，影响卷面的干净。建议学生用不浅不深、笔画不粗不细的蓝色中性笔写作文。这样的作文写出来，与黑色的方格形成一定的视觉对比，阅卷老师在视觉上有眼前一亮的感觉，分数上可能就会占便宜。在用蓝色中性笔写作文的时候，注意不要用字把方格填满，建议占字格下面或者左下面的四分之三，这样，显得作文每行的层次感比较强。卷面显得也相对美观 【技巧四】：开头结尾要简练，最好首尾两行半 除了切忌大肚子作文外，“大头作文”也要不得。建议考生在写作文的时候，开头结尾占两行半的卷面。顶多也不能超过三行半。想想看，一个开头就占太多的空间，阅卷老师的视觉又会有瞬间的疲劳，也会影响阅卷老师的情绪。 【技巧五】：动笔之前要拟题，漂亮标题如美女
考试作文中，一般都是由考生自己来拟定题目，题目不宜太长和太短。怎么拟题呢?对于成绩一般的考生，应该采取特别措施了。拟题的办法有2个：
一是你去搜索一下作文拟题目，可以找到作文老师讲述的类似技巧。
二是考生家长或考生，赶紧去翻阅最近一年的读者和青年文摘的合订本，根据题材，选择几十个比较精彩的标题，背下来，考试的时候可能比葫芦画瓢地就能采用到。
走过风雨
雨后的嫩草更加青翠可人，雪后的青松愈显高洁挺直。惊涛拍岸，撞击礁石，才能卷起千堆雪——那瑰丽的浪花。所有一切，无一不在诠释着风雨之中弥足珍贵的那一份坚持，那一份梦想！于是乎，我明白了：所有的风雨，所有的阴霾，所有的困难挫折都只不过是成功的前奏，只要怀揣梦想，坚持不懈，就一定能于风雨之中采撷到成功之花！
瞧，那低矮破旧茅屋里的那个骨瘦如柴的老者是谁？是的，他就是诗圣杜甫，一个生于盛唐却终于战乱贫病的中华诗坛伟人。他的一生跌宕起伏，早年年少气盛，踌躇满志，后却遭遇安史之乱，颠沛流离，穷困潦倒，绝望挫折充斥着他的生活。但他矢志不渝，固守自己的心灵净土。他感悟艰难，提炼生活，高吟出“安得广厦千万间，大?天下寒士俱欢颜”的高昂诗句。是艰难困苦磨砺了他的心志，坚定了他的信念，拓宽了他
的人生。可见，对于人生路上的风吹雨打，如果勇敢面对，坦然接受，其实不过如此！勇往直前，猛地回头，却发现另是一番“山重水尽疑无路，柳暗花明又一村”的境界！
听，那一连串的连珠妙语从何而来？是的，她是康斯坦丝，英国一个著名的法庭辩护律师。她从小就被冠以“丑孩子”的称号，家人、朋友也都不喜欢她。生活看似索然无味，奋斗也仿佛无济于事，但她却自始至终高举信念的明灯，立志成为一个律师。她刻苦自学，对着镜子练习辩论，一步一个脚印?终获成功，完成了丑小鸭到白天鹅的蜕变。她的成功雄辩地证明：风雨途中，谁的脚步越坚定，谁的未来就越有分量，一个个脚印，都将深深镌刻在追梦路上！
仍记得南方雪灾时的冰天冻地，汶川地震时的山崩地裂，凤凰台风的风雨交加，以及西北地区的连续干旱。纵使当时有过泪水，有过惶恐，有过彷徨，但勤劳勇敢的中国人民手牵手，心连心，一起渡过难关，一起跃过险滩，相偎相依，不离不弃，毅然开辟出一条阳光大道。走过风雨，穿越荆棘，如今的我们，更有激情、有勇气去接受生活的挑战，顺应时代的召唤！
凤凰涅槃后重获新生，梅花陸寒后更添幽香，一帆风顺的人生平淡无奇。多些风雨，多些磨炼，多些成长，在风雨中我们干涸的心田得以润泽，我们搁浅的梦想之舟得以返航。笑对人生，笑迎挫折，走过风雨，就是走向崭新的人生！
“他说风雨中，这点痛算什么，擦干泪，不要问，至少我们还有梦。”迎着风，踏着雨，我们一路高歌，一路远行，坚信风雨过后会有彩虹
名师点评：观点鲜明，针对性强。考场议论文最紧要处便是观点准确鲜明。本文开头用比兴的手法引出观点，鲜明而形象。杜甫和康斯坦丝之例均能做到针对论点进行叙例和紧扣论点进行分析，最后两段?论点也均以不同的方式呈现。这样，文章的观点一以贯之，但又富有变化，不觉单调重复。同时，第四段乃联系国情时事进行论证，将观点拓展到国家民族，使文章具备了较强的现实意义。 行文酣畅，文采飞扬。“言之无文，行而不远。”本文说理，多用整句，整散结合，读之酣畅。加之文章比喻形象，引用恰当，意蕴丰富，可谓文采斐然，殊为难得。亦可见考生平时训练有素，具备较强的驾驭语言的能力。
我多想陪着奶奶
奶奶老了，她走不动了，整天窝在小小的院子里。
奶奶老了，我却长大了，再没时间拉着她的围裙跟在她身后撒娇了。
现在，陪伴她的只有那一院子的我出生时她亲手栽下的金银花，和太阳透过树叶撒下的细碎的跳动的阳光。
“奶奶，快过年了，明天我们考完试就放假！”在学校里的我兴奋地打电话给奶奶。 “那好，明天奶奶做好吃的等我的小猴子回来吃。”听得出来，奶奶说话的声音里都带着笑意。 天公不作美，我刚收拾好桌子里零乱的东西，便看见外面飘起了鹅毛般的大雪，阴沉的天空摇摇欲坠，仿佛随时都有塌下的危险。我不情愿地背着行李向校门口走去，却发现一个熟悉的身影从大雪中缓缓走来，像是从流逝的时光中隐约走来
我与奶奶并肩走在路上。中学时的我明显比奶奶高出一头。她穿着一双已经十分陈旧的棉布鞋，在堆满了雪的乡间小路上每走一步都十分吃力。她努力地保持着身体的
平衡，但她手中的伞却始终罩在我的头上，紧握雨伞的手在风雪中艰难地调整着角度。奶奶的手，已经说不出是什么颜色，猛一看去，灰色的像是严寒中枯干的树枝。风挟着雪不断地向着她那佝偻的单薄的身体袭来。漫天的雪花和她花白的头发相互交织着，模糊了我的视线。
我们就这样相互支持着，艰难地走回了那个熟悉温暖的小院。
仰头一看天，已经变成了淡蓝，阳光蹦蹦跳跳地敲开了这座农家小院。严冬让金银花枝上仅有的那片绿叶也凋落了，没有了树叶的笼罩，阳光肆意洒满了院子。奶奶笑着站在门口，显得神采奕奕，似乎心情也如这小院纯净透彻。我在小院里也不肯闲着，不听妈妈提及，我差点忘记吃粽子了。哇！太棒了，妈妈竟带来这么多粽子，我们都涌上去把妈妈围住，剥开粽子皮，鲜红的大枣就浮现在眼前了，接着一股沁鼻的糯米香飘来，我的口水都流出来了，一口下去，粽子少了半边，妈妈看着我们狼吞虎咽的样子，开心地笑了，呵！端午的味道，幸福加甜蜜啊！
你知道我这一生中最难忘的是什么吗？就是2010年的端午记忆，我永远都不会忘记这一天，端午的味道——四个字“幸福多多！！” 【满分亮点】
1、描述细腻，情真意切。全文围绕“端午节”自然展开，细致描述了端午节这一一会儿荡荡儿时的秋千，一会儿摇摇那口古井
奶奶老了，身体也佝偻弱小了，但她却像是阳光，照亮我的心灵，带给我甜甜的温暖。我多想，永远这样陪着奶奶 名师点评： 结构严谨。文章采用总分总的结构形式，开头以饱含深情的语句表达对奶奶的想念，正文部分详写奶奶对“我”的真情的关爱，结尾呼应开头，抒发感情。
描写感人。考生文笔细腻，善于以细致的描写表现人物特点。文章对奶奶进行了浓墨重彩的描绘，有语言、外貌、动作等多方面的描写，立体展现人物，还恰当地进行环境描写，很好地起到了烘托渲染的作用。
对比鲜明。归途中的艰辛，回家后的温暖，形成鲜明对比。在对比中表现了奶奶对“我”的爱，“我”对奶奶的感激之情。从而使文章主旨更鲜明。 得分点描写细腻感情真挚
端午的味道
端午的味道，有如百合花的清香，淡而优雅。 端午的味道，有如茉莉花的幽香，妙而纯洁。 端午的味道，有如玫瑰花的芳香，鲜而浪漫。
早盼，晚盼，日盼，夜盼，盼盼盼盼望已久的端午节终于到了，可是今年的端午节与往昔不同，因为在外地求学，为了中考的奋力一搏，我不得不留在学校里过端午节。要知道，这可是我第一次不能和家人一起庆祝端午节。原本以为这是件很悲伤的事，可没想到却是如此快乐。
一大清早，还没睡饱呢，就被几个室友吵醒了：“快起来啊，我们到后面那座山上去采艾蒿了！”之后莫名其妙地被人拖出了温暖的被窝，再之后便是一阵忙乱。十分钟之后，我们各自整理好了衣装，迈开了豪爽的步伐，朝后面那座山进军，哇！端午的味道，充满了激情。 到了山脚下，我们不约而同地抬头望着这高似喜马拉雅山的山峰，互相打气后毅然向山顶攀去，由于刚刚下过小雨，所以没登多高我们裤管都被打湿了。“啊！艾蒿。”顺着声音望去，嘿！别说还真有哇，我们一窝蜂似地涌过去，开始疯采，边采边在嘴里嘟囔着：“希望中考顺利，祝愿家人一切平安”呀！端午的味道，满载欢喜。
我们手中握着艾蒿束，头上戴着艾蒿环，兴高采烈地下山回到学校。刚坐到位子上不久，一个熟悉的身影走了进来。我定睛一看，啊！是妈妈。妈妈看到我说：“初三了也不能不过端午节啊！想不想吃粽子啊？来，把粽子拿过去和同学们解解馋吧！”呀！
天发生在“我”、同学和母亲之间的诸多生活场景：清晨被室友叫醒，采到艾蒿互相祝福，妈妈意外到校送粽子这些情景，富于生活气息，很容易唤起读者的共鸣。 2、结构新巧，富于创意。文章最富创意之处是三个段落结尾句的设计，分别体现出端午“充满激情”、“满载欢喜”、“幸福甜蜜”的特点，结构上自然构成段尾排比句，使文章显得层次清晰。文章的开篇也颇具特色，诗意的排比句把端午的味道做了形象的比喻；结尾设问自然，巧妙扣题。从语言看，综合运用比喻、排比等修辞手法，长短句结合，营造出端午节的浓浓意境。
端午的味道
端午节有着其丰富的文化内涵：作为传承了数千年的节日，根植于民间，端午节始终具有其独特的魅力。根植于古老的民族传统，与其他传统节日相比，并融入了民族的血液。这便是端午的味道，一种散发着亘古的芬芳，影响了无数炎黄子孙的味道。 端午节的由来，要追溯到两千多年前战国时期的屈原。屈原因受小人的讥谤而不得重用，终于不堪世风浑浊，投江而死。人们以端午节纪念屈原时，就注定了这种清白、廉洁的品格将被人们铭记，也为端午注入了一种沁人心脾的味道。
沿着历史的轨迹，追寻屈原的品格，并体味到端午真正味道的人不胜枚举。
东晋著名田园诗人陶渊明，因不愿与世俗同流合污，做了几年小官便归隐山林，整日过着“采菊东篱下，悠然见南山”的怡然生活；诗人于谦也曾留下“粉身碎骨浑不怕，要留清白在人间”的千古佳句；一代清官海瑞则更是两袖清风、廉洁正直的官员的典范。 正是由于这种品格生生不息地流淌在世世代代华夏儿女的心中，才使端午节流传至今。 然而，在物欲横流的当今社会，越来越多的人忽视了端午本来的味道，廉洁之人、清正之人越来越少，端午也已成为一种形式，这也许有违屈原的初衷吧？而这也正是国人的悲哀。
端午的味道，是中华传统文明的味道，是清正的社会风气的味道，是有助于一个民族发展的味道。
希望能品尝到端午味道的不只是我们中的一部分，而是全体中国人！
【满分亮点】1、文字犀利，蕴含深厚。文章站在历史的高度深刻地评价了“端午的味道”，为了使说理充分，作者援引历史上的陶渊明、于谦、海瑞等著名人物，从道理事实多方面诠释“端午的味道”。对今天的某些社会现象进行了尖锐的批判。
2、行文流畅，发人深思。开篇即点明端午的文化内涵，自然点题。行文中追溯端午的由来，再次点明端午的味道，凸显人物清白、廉洁的品格。最后文章结合今天的社会现实，批判了某些忽视端午原本味道的某些国人，呼吁人们继承端午的味道，促进民族的发展。